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Post by shiori on Apr 30, 2009 1:30:53 GMT -5
Name:Shiori Age:117 Appearance: Companion : Kairi Personality and history: Shiori loves all nature be it plants or animals. Alone side is her trusted companion a Black Leopard named Kairi. Shiori also picks wild herbs to make her own medicines. Shiori does achery and sword fighting mostly for fun, but if worse comes to worse she doesn't mind pulling out her blade. Once you prove yourself to be a friend she will gladly risk her life for you. Her most trusted friend and companion is a black leopard Kairi. Shiori rescued Kairi from starving.After finding her in the forest hiding from humans that killed her mother,brothers and sisters. Ever since then they have been inseparable! 3 years later Kairi and I travel the earth to see new things and meet new people. Gear:By the way Kairi does help me carry some things in a saddle bag she wears sometimes. I must say it's very helpful! =P) Backpack Sword and sheath Bow 70 Arrows small vail of poison Dagger Bedroll Weeks worth of rations 2 water skins (full) a small wooden flute used as a hair piece necklace that can keep a small scroll and a large cat collar and rope
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Post by Archangel on Apr 30, 2009 11:34:01 GMT -5
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Brovo
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Post by Brovo on Apr 30, 2009 18:09:08 GMT -5
Hey if you don't mind some critiquing to make your future characters even better than this one..
Not to say this one is bad by the way if you are interpreting it that way, this character is just fine. Though just in the future you may want to check..
Personality: You switch between third person and first person. While this isn't a deal breaker, it's something to look out for in the future.
Gear: You've got quite a bit of gear there! xD! Although I'll just assume that either the cat helps carry some of that or you have some sort of backpack which you forgot to mention.
Just small things. Not really deal-breakers at all, but minor details you may wish to look out for in the future.
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Post by shiori on May 1, 2009 23:12:16 GMT -5
yes Kairi does help carry some of my things. in my mind she has a kind of like a saddle bag that she sometimes wears. (it would look like the ones you would see on one of those k9 unit dogs. if you'v seen one you should know what i'm talking about) and ya i see what you mean about the switching between 1st and 3rd person. lol i'v always seemed to have a prob with that in school.
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